|April 8, 2012||#1|
Another poem, i know it's been a while since last time and i'm srry, i just haven't been in the mood to write =/
I've had this in my mind for a while, and it's inspired by a song as many of my poems are =)
This is the one that inspired me:
For the poem:
Do you remember when we first met?
How I found you, in the darkest of places?
Your wings were broken.
And your heart was crippled.
And I reached out to you, I gave you my hand.
You were scared, and tried to resist.
You bit me, and hit me.
But I kept reaching out.
Eventually you took it, the hand offered.
You let me drag you out of there, into the light.
Such a pitiful sight you were.
But I took care of you, protected you.
And I watched as you healed.
How you stood up, forgetting the pain.
Transforming, from the scared little child you were.
Into a young woman, ready to spread her wings.
And now the time has come, for us to say goodbye.
My work is finally over.
You have been healed, my blackbird.
Itís time for you to fly.
Unfurl your black wings.
Let the wind carry you home.
Fly away my blackbird.
May you never be broken again.
|April 8, 2012||#2|
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that was sweet and wonderful. I enjoyed this for it had such a nice tale to tell. Thank you for sharing this and I hope your next poem will come out faster.
|April 8, 2012||#3|
I'll try to put up a new poem faster this time =)
|April 8, 2012||#4|
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Lol that was cool. I love how old you sound. Anyway that was a nice poem, I expected some romance...
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great poem! i wanna read more!!!! :D..
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|April 8, 2012||#6|
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i actually found it great. ^_^
a straight forward concept, i like the simple casual language in it.
idk how to explain it, it's breezy.. lol
"One thousand miles an hour, I'm just like anyone
I want to feel the road of tar beneath the wheel"
Set by Tomboy~
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hm interesting poem and style u used
and the music was nice
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|April 8, 2012||#8|
Haha i tried to sound old, so i'm glad i succeeded ^^
But i dont know if i used any particular style to it :o
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